Well, I do not really know if any of these will be effective. It is elusive as Steve suggests. People will spend very little time deciphering your coded message (it’s coded because it is not obvious)
On the one side you have your name at the top (change that) and on the other side it looks like you may be a Realtor, roofer, painter… and you do not mention window cleaning (don’t assume they will read down to the name to decipher)
$25 off of what?
I do not care for reversed type (white on a black background) It is normally harder to read as you will notice once one of the cards are in you hands.
You are making this a hard sell because the whole thing is designed in an effort causing fashion.
I have always been against generic stock house photos, as 20 different industries use them. At least use pics of some windows being cleaned. The pictures are supposed to further drive home the message, not distract.
Obsessively meticulous? obsessive people scare me and the word is rarely used in a positive context (know of any?) Do you think everyone knows what meticulous means?
I would tank the whole thing and start over, but that’s just me (yep, that is why so many people love me lol)
be sure to let us know what happens